Friday, 17 August 2018

I see the light shining thow the clouds on to the mountain top. I feel amazed of how much work was put in to the mountain. I can smell the fog coming from the mountain.I can feel the fog coming from the mountain in between my fingers. I can taste the air mix with the fog. I can hear the bird from a far and people on the mountain.
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4 comments:

  1. Anonymous24 May 2019 at 14:22

    hi my name is Lukas, nice story but include a little bit describing words

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  2. Anonymous31 May 2019 at 12:36

    Hi Jamie,
    My name is Christopher I'm from St Pius X Catholic school and I'm a year 7 student.I really love your story and the picture. But you should you use more describing words and you spelt though wrong you spelt thow. But besides that you did an amazing job!

    Kind Regards
    Christopher

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  3. Anonymous21 June 2019 at 12:24

    Hi Jamie ,
    I like how you describe the mountain ,
    Only if next time you check over it for spelling errors.
    What would you name this mountain ?

    Good Job

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  4. Anonymous23 August 2019 at 13:53

    Hello Jamie,
    My name is Dianne and I am a year 7 student attending St Pius X School, I really enjoyed reading your writing and I really love the picture that you have chosen.

    I can see that you are using the senses and I love it how you are describing the picture.

    Keep up the fantastic work!
    Kind Regards,
    Dianne

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